I liked how added many details.For example, how the place look or how they felt. It made me imagine that I'm there. also,I think it was very great idea to put the real picture. I wonder where have they taken the picture. I think what you can do to make your wonderful piece to more wonderful is to add more dialogue in the story. when you do that, the story will be interesting! I think it was a very great migration story💕
Great job! I liked how you used good word expression and word choice
ReplyDeleteI liked how added many details.For example, how the place look or how they felt. It made me imagine that I'm there. also,I think it was very great idea to put the real picture. I wonder where have they taken the picture.
ReplyDeleteI think what you can do to make your wonderful piece to more wonderful is to add more dialogue in the story. when you do that, the story will be interesting!
I think it was a very great migration story💕