I think you put a lot of pictures and that really helped me see what had happened through out the story. The pictures helped me because I could see what things looked like back then, like the telephone and trains. One thing that I suggest for you is that when you record you should add expressions because it sounded like you didn't enjoy reading the book to us.
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ReplyDeleteI think you put a lot of pictures and that really helped me see what had happened through out the story. The pictures helped me because I could see what things looked like back then, like the telephone and trains.
ReplyDeleteOne thing that I suggest for you is that when you record you should add expressions because it sounded like you didn't enjoy reading the book to us.
You added lots of details and dialogue. You also spoke very clearly, so I could understand the story better. Keep up the great work!
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ReplyDeleteI noticed you made the story feel like it was right in front of me!
ReplyDeleteBut maybe you can try to make the paragraphs longer.
Great work!🤜🏻🤛🏻