I like how you set the scene for the reader by really describing the village and how life was there. An example where you did that is when you wrote'We were seeing all the damage caused by the previous flood, our village was close to a river that was filled with rocks. The flood destroyed the house and crops.' One suggestion is to add more internal thinking and feelings.
I like how at the start you added a lot of details about what happened in the flood.
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ReplyDeleteI like how you set the scene for the reader by really describing the village and how life was there. An example where you did that is when you wrote'We were seeing all the damage caused by the previous flood, our village was close to a river that was filled with rocks. The flood destroyed the house and crops.' One suggestion is to add more internal thinking and feelings.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the setting
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